my Sir Edmund Hillary sick sentences

Sick Sentences

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The man walked up the slope. He used poles. The sun was bright. The sky was blue. He looked forward to the view from the top.

my version:

the man trudged up the steep slope. He used sharp pointy poles. The sun was a shining  gem. The sky was a lovely bright  baby blue. he was determined to encounter the top of the tallest mountain in the world.